Critique Service

Why not get your work looked over before submission?  As a published author I can provide valuable feedback on your writing.  My critique includes:

  • Assessment of storyline, characters and your author voice.manuscript-critique-service-pic
  • Advice on grammar and punctuation.   (Full proofread available for small extra sum.)
  • Help with presentation and layout.
  • Suggestions on how to edit your work to the right length.
  • Areas to work on, and most importantly, your strengths!
  • Free appraisal of your submission package, if applicable.

I specialise in picture books and young fiction as that is the area I’m published in, but I’m happy to look at any writing for children up to young adult.  Just choose your rate and email your manuscript to lou dot treleaven at sky dot com.

“Your comments are so perceptive and I would not have seen things like that at all but yet what you say just makes sense! You really have a talent – because your critique is so constructive and gives a manuscript wings.”  ES

“You have no idea how excited and encouraged I am with your fantastic, constructive critique … I’m chomping at the bit to incorporate as many of the ideas you presented as I can, as I’m totally convinced of how much it will improve them.  I wish I’d come across you much earlier.”  CB

“Lou’s critiques are detailed and full of practical advice. She notices things and points you in the right direction. I will certainly try to use the tips she gave me and improve the stories, things I hadn’t noticed myself – thanks Lou.”  AK


“Really helpful advice and thorough feedback.”  RB

“Much more detailed than I was expecting and very constructive… I will certainly be using your service in future.”  KS

“Your advice is invaluable.”  CT

“Happy I contacted you.  Great advice.”  JG

Critique rates (please note new pricing structure – payment is now per manuscript)

£25 for up to 1000 words (great for picture books) – click here to pay £25 via PayPal

then £5 per additional 1000 words after that – click here to pay other amount via PayPal

Plus free synopsis and cover letter critique with each manuscript!

Proof reading service

If you don’t need a critique but just want your manuscript checked for typos or errors in grammar or punctuation, I can proof read it for £5 per 1000 words.  Or add this to your critique package.


In addition, you can return a previously critiqued manuscript for 50% off the stated price.  A re-critique usually takes the form of comments in your manuscript rather than separate report, so I can really dig down into the text!


Payment should be via paypal to lou dot treleaven at sky dot com (or use the links above) or you can use bank transfer (please email me for details).  Once I have received both your payment and manuscript I will book you in.  Current waiting time is around 6 weeks.  If you have any questions please do email me, I would love to help.Save









57 responses to “Critique Service

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  2. I have six short stories about virtues, is that a marketable idea

  3. Hi Lou,
    Greetings! My latest story for editing has been sent to you and a payment was transferred to cover the cost. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
    Thank you kindly,
    lili shang

  4. Hi Lou,

    Apologies, can you please tell me how I send you my manuscript and payment? I have a picture book manuscript which I would love you to critique. It is my first book so this is all very new to me.

    Kind regards


  5. Thanks Lou, I will send it over on Friday.



  6. Hi Lou, Just sent you a picture book manuscript and the payment. So looking forward to your comments.

  7. helenosaurus

    Hi there. If I have a few picture book manuscripts that together total around the 2000 word mark, can I send them all for the price of £35? xx

  8. Denise Parker

    Hi Lou, Just sent you two more picture book manuscripts and payment. I shall look forward to your valuable comments.

  9. Hi Lou.

    Would love to have your critique.

    Problem being I can’t think of a way to send my children’s picture books online due to their unique format. Although I’m not trying to say they’re as good (!) … they’re a bit like The Hungry Caterpillar … the text doesn’t work in isolation without the images and the tabs at the top.

    Would you accept hard copies as a one-off please? Once you’ve seen them maybe you could suggest any ways around this, as lots of publishers want online submission as you know.

    Many thanks 🙂

    • Hi Christine. I’d love to look at your books but I’d be a bit worried about sending originals in the post. How about photographing each page and emailing me the photographs? Lay them flat and photograph from above to get as good a copy as you can.

  10. lorrainedancer

    Hi Lou,
    I have written a few Picture books and would love you to critique them, if possible.
    Many thanks
    Lorraine x

  11. Hi Lou,
    Thank you, so much. I have e-mailed four Picture Books to you.
    If you could e-mail me bank details, I will transfer today. Many thanks x

  12. Hi Lou,
    I have just transferred money to you.
    Many thanks x

  13. Hi Lou,
    Thank you so much for your positive critique and advice, I found it all very helpful and encouraging. Many thanks x

  14. Hi Lou,
    I’ve completed my first middle grade book. Are you interested in looking at it?

  15. Hi Lou,
    I am wanting to send you some picture books to critique- I understand that I can send 4 (of under 500 words each) and it would be 35 pounds cost- but regarding the 5 pounds per 1000 thereafter, does that mean I could send 8 (each of under 500 words say), for 45 pounds? Thanks

  16. Great I will send some to your e-mail address and paypal to the same address, many thanks!

  17. Okay – thanks – watch this space!

  18. Hi Lou,
    If I have a picture book manuscript of 1,281 words would it be a £30 critique fee? I understand it’s probably just a shade too long hence wishing the critique! 🙂
    Kind Regards

  19. Hi Lou,
    I am looking at letting you do a critique of my picture books, however it’s probably a simple question but…
    Am I allowed to ask questions such as should I resubmit to publishers agents etc. Even ones I still haven’t heard from and ask how to go about that in the email or isn’t it simply just a critique/grammar check without any guidance for next steps?

  20. Hi Lou,
    I managed to get my picture book manuscript down to 998 words! I have emailed it over to you for critique and have also made the paypal payment.

  21. Hi Lou,
    Would like to send you my manuscript for a critique. I tried to email you but your email address did not seem to work. Would also like to pay by bank transfer. Looking forward to hearing from you

  22. Hi Lou, excited to hear your feedback….payment done and manuscript sent! Jacqueline x

  23. I, too, am having difficulty emailing you for details to send a manuscript and transfer payment. Can you advise please? Many thanks

  24. I sent you an email with my manuscripts and paid through PayPal. Looking forward to hearing your thoughts.

  25. Hi Lou, same as above, I’ve sent my manuscript and paid through PayPal, just hoping you could let me know you’ve received it. Thanks!

  26. Hi Lou, I’ve sent it again, please let me know if you’ve got it. If not, is there another email address I could send it to? Not sure why it wouldn’t have gone through, it’s showing up in my sent messages, but then so did the last one!
    Thanks! Mae

  27. Hi Lou!

    I was wondering whether you have received my email which I sent on Friday. No rush, I just want to know that I used the correct addrresse.

    Look forward to hearing from you,

  28. Hi Lou, please could you send me your BACS details for payment for a picture book manuscript please
    Many thanks!

  29. Hi Lou,
    Do you accept PDF? I have a book almost complete (minus some illustration) and would like a critique before sending it to agents.
    Many thanks

  30. Hi Lou,
    Have just sent my PDF and payment.
    Many thanks

  31. Tatiana Fiquitiva

    Hi Lou, I have emailed you. Lou

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  33. Hi there, do you still offer this service, I have written a number of poems, kind of in the vein of Julia Donaldson, and wonder whether to just read to my kids, or seek some form of publishing?

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